Thursday, September 24, 2009
piggys perspective
Oh my goodness. I really cant handle jack he is starting an out rage. his fire idea worked out so well. besides we anent thinking before we do anything and just jumping to conclusions like the fire Ralph had a good idea of making a signal fire and everybody just rushes up to the mountain and we cause this huge wild fire and burn down half of the island and we still haven't gotten off this horrific island because he had to go and hunt like the great man he is and not pay any attention to the fire. the ship was looking for us and it just passed. thats not even the worst part jack hates my guts now for no reason.
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Lucc!
ReplyDeleteOkay so you did a really good job of being in character, I like how u incorporated how much Jack hates Piggy into this. But I think you could of added more of what happened in the chapter because its kinda short. But I also like how u added that Piggy don't get paid any attention to, cause thats a important part.
Its good (:
ily
good job on being ur charecther but i think ur talking about the wrong chapter idk but im pretty sure. you might want to make a little longer because it is a little short. you want too capitilize the begining of every sentence and name. use vocab next time. besides that you did really good.
ReplyDeleteOkay so you did a really good job overall and stayed in character really well as piggy.Yet it's kinda short and your vocab is a little off but that's mainly your only fixes.
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